Jared Verebey
Professor Young
English 1100
November 1st
2014
Can Beauty Be Constructed
Beauty is something special and is
scene by each and every person in the world very differently. Many visualize
beauty as something natural and other see beauty as a tall, skinny, white
blonde with a ton of make up on. Beauty can vary in the ways people see it but
the truth is that everything that people say is beautiful is not always
naturally created. In my opinion, beauty has the ability to be constructed.
Beauty definitely has the ability of
being constructed. For example: The video we watched in class proved that a
disabled person could have fun with their disability and generate himself or
herself to still be a beautiful human being. A person without legs is now able
to wear different pairs of legs to show off that they are still beautiful. Another
example of how beauty has the ability of being constructed is children who have
the cleft lips. They have the option to get surgery to fix that issue and
basically rearrange their own face into a constructed beautiful person. One
last way beauty can be constructed is through make up being put on a person.
People tend to say males or females that have make up on are considered to be
more beautiful. In my opinion, that is not the case. But overall, there is no
doubt that beauty as the ability to be constructed in multiple ways.
Natural beauty is something special
and not many people see it all the time. Beauty is something more than just
looks and visualizations. It has the ability to be constructed just like
different pairs of legs for a disabled man or women or even a child or any aged
person with a cleft lip. Beauty is something very special and everyone has
beauty within himself or herself. Beauty can occur in any way and has the
ability to be constructed.
Jared, you have done a good job of getting your ideas down onto paper about this topic. At the same time as you move forward with developing your ideas, please remember to do the following in order to earn higher than a C+ for the course:
ReplyDelete1) proofread carefully. Read your first sentence. You have a homophone error: scene vs. seen. Which word should it be?
2) include author's name and title of book or talk. Whenever you are responding to a reading or a video, you must include the name of the author/lecturer as well as the title. This makes your writing more vivid and specific.
3). separate your paragraphs whenever you have a new idea. Look at paragraph 3. Where could you separate your paragraph?
Do my comments make sense? Please respond.